For the record, I'm still interested!

Also my soul is currently out on loan to the army so it might be a little while before I can sign it over to someone else.

Soon....
So what does one have to do to become a demon..
Sick on law enforcement/military ect.. People suck and can be horrible.

On a positive note everyday is different!

Edited by user Monday, December 1, 2014 2:14:50 PM(UTC)  | Reason: Not specified

I'll sign so long as I to use my own pen! (invisible ink and some of your own fine print anyone!!!)

Make me a beta!



The Deposed King

That's what it is looking like. These take me a while. Even if I get more writing time I have some other series waiting in the wings

Wouldn't be control be more of an issue? Most of those displaced humans are going to be seriously pissed off... It might work if you get them to leave voluntarily, but then again, the kind of people that actually want to become a demon are not exactly the kind of people easy to control ;)

As for beta-reading, I am split on the issue. I have done my fair share of D&D adventure development and editing for Wizard of the Coast's various organized play programs and I love doing it. At the same time, it requires a different outset when actually reading the material, which does come at the cost of simple reading enjoyment if you get what I mean. It certainly costs more energy and it can be time consuming. Of course, I could simply read it, but then I would capture only the more glaring errors or the occasional minor one by accident and then it would be fairer to simply wait for the release ;)

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Tizzy? Really? Then how did the Nuclear Reaction/Quarks issue got out? And it was all because of a single paragraph that the narrator says. If the narator just haven't said that students study quarks, it would have been a non issue.

Of course there are some more mistakes that had really embelished the story so I really doubt the truthfulness of your last sentence.

I'm not talking about you! After all, the story is not about you. You don't even have a POV there.

It is incongruous that people there should know Quarks but know almost zero about Nuclear reactions. It just don't make sense

There of course more things that don't make sense but those are for another time.

And of course it doesn't follow.

Now I am curious... Do the wizards know there are other worlds? Do they realize the demons visit multiple worlds? Are they aware the demons could actually tell them about advanced technology? A society rich in magic has little reason to develop certain technological advances since the earlier versions tend to be really ineffecient (especially compared to magic), but the more advanced versions most definitely are (unless the far majority of people has a magic talent).

@Tizzy

It is not because the narrator know about quarks. It is because the wizards know about quarks. Hell, I could almost generalize that Astlanians know about quarks:



It is clear that the said student isn't the narrator, and it is also clear that the student learn it from a Wizard and many would have known about it since on of its application the Cloud of Disintegration is rather a wellknown spell as noted by being known not only by Exador and Lenamare but also the young ones like Rupert and the soldiers. Also note that it talked also about "incredible amount of energy" which is rather describes properly what nuclear reactions are like. Then, dumbly, later, not one wizard, even the ones of higher orders (even Exador with millinias of study), can work out how Lenamare's little explosion work, which is a nuclear bomb, which uses nuclear reactions "incredible amount of energy" to work, even when it was explained to them how it works. This mishap is rather subtle but it is still a mistake.

And there are mistakes that are more into your face... but I like the story very much so I give it a pass.

@Madfox

It is not really given in the book but it seems that Demons have been taking many toys from modern Earth, our Earth. Elevators, escalators, textiles, furniture, appliances, cars, etc.

Of course this is another mistake. Many of our devices aren't really meant to work at high temperatures. Since the Abyss is where humans would cook to crisp if they ever go there, such devices would not have survived there either. Elevator circuitry would have fizzled, escalators would have grind itself, textiles would have disintegrated, furniture would have dried and crack if its made of wood, or melt if made of plastic, appliances, which often contains plastic and very sensitive components, would not last long, and cars would have thier tires, upholstery and gadgetry melting, etc. The scene there really doesn't make sense.